First Draft Feedback

Teacher Feedback:

What went well?
-Camera work
-Location
-Running Shots


Improvements:
-Production company title missing
-Titles need sorting
-Where does the diabetic sound go? (especially with the footsteps)
-Dialogue sound needs smoothing out
-Unclear what he is holding
-Sound needs to be included with what the leader says
-Don't put the film name at the end as it feels like a short film/ trailer 

Action on Feedback:
Action on the teacher feedback is evident in my final draft as all of the improvements have been address in order to create a well executed and comprehensive film opening.
I went back on the third shoot day and shot some new shots to give a clearer understanding of what was happening and what the device was that Martin was holding. I also moved the film title from the end and had the final title as Written/Directed by.


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